Ignatius

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Check out the third definition of trail (below), and respond, using the word exactly as it appears, in no less than 33 and no more than 333 words.”

Trail:  to move, flow, or extend slowly in thin streams <smoke trailing from chimneys>

New Orleans: Streetcar on Carrollton Avenue pa...

It was August in New Orleans, and the night was opaque with a steamy-stench that lingered in the nostrils. They were two strangers waiting for the Carrollton Avenue streetcar; grey beads of sweat crawling like ants over their scalps, a trickling trail down their backs.

The woman put a Tareyton between her lips and the man unexpectedly half-lunged to light her cigarette. The flame singed the tips of her tarantula-eyelashes.

“What the …!” She jerked back, a little scared, and looked him dead in the eyes.

All three of them.

There was a blue eye on the left, brown on the right, and  then the erroneous white eye―minus its iris and pupil― haphazardly developed  smack between his manicured eyebrows.

It resembled a runny poached egg white.

“Ooops!” He blushed. “Clumsy of me…” He shoved the lighter in his jeans pocket and offered his hand. “Name’s Ignatius.  And you are?”

“Uh, Twyla.” She touched her fingertips to his.

“Lovely name, Twyla.” He smiled.  “Reminds me of… the twilight…”

“No shit?” She flipped her long blonde hair over her shoulder, Cher Bono style. “You, umm, have three eyes…” Twyla took a long drag from her cigarette, leaned her head back and blew a  smoke ring.  Its trail  hovered in the soggy air like a lost angel’s halo.

“Indeed.” Ignatius grinned, winking his middle eye. “So I’m told.”

Their streetcar clamored  up and screeched to an eventual stop.

Neither Ignatius nor Twyla made a move, their five eyes glaring at the interruption as if it were a telemarketer on wheels.  After several seconds, the driver shrugged and the streetcar lurched away.

Iridescent gnats orbited in the wrinkled glow of the cracked street light. Twyla carefully reached up and peeled Ignatius’ middle eye off of his face like a wet Band-Aid. His errant eyeball felt like phlegm between her fingers.  She flicked it in the filthy gutter.

Twyla crossed the street and rounded the corner without a backward glance, while Ignatius—still grinning—stood blindly alone.

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16 Comments

  1. millodello says:

    Did you write that while you were awake? If so? Awesome. If not? Incredible. Good work.

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  2. yearstricken says:

    Lots of good images in this and an unexpected ending. Nice.

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  3. Thanks for linking up to Trifecta this week. I loved your response–so different, bizarre. I went to Tulane for grad school, so any New Orleans writing always touches a chord with me. Loved this.

    Remember that in Trifecta we look for the third definition of the word given. In this case, we were looking for the verb, not the noun.

    Hope to see you back again soon.

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  4. Amanda says:

    This is amazing. Weird and quirky. Very nice work.

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  5. booguloo says:

    Like it a lot.

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  6. chrstnj says:

    Creepy, but oh so different. I was totally drawn in.

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  7. The imagery is wicked. Great reading as usual.

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  8. Reno says:

    Awesome as always.

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