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Haiku Heights challenge for the day is the word “deserted.”
I deserted you
because I learned that your heart
was telling mine lies
Tags: Haiku and Related Forms, Haiku Heights, poetry
I love your Haiku, but I’ve never been good at Haikus. I learned “Tanka” instead. It’s five lines.
line 1 is 5 syllables or fewer: line2 is 7 syllables or fewer; line 3 is 5 syllables or fewer; line 4 and line 5 are each 7 syllables or fewer. Here is a Tanka by Elizabeth Searl Lamb, “first lady of Haiku” who began writing Tankas in her 80s: I walk and walk ~ through the house to find ~ the light I might have left on ~ oh, July’s ~ full moon!
Hi Marylin, I’ve heard of Tanka but never tried it. Thanks for stopping by and sharing Elizabeth’s Tanka. :-)
I’m not an expert on Haiku, so I don’t know about seasons/nature rules. Rules aside, I like this one because it’s relatable.
Thanks Janna :-) Much appreciated!
I don’t do poetry but my understanding was it was to do with nature. However, like Tiffany said, things might be loosening up. Everywhere. Enough to confuse a person.
I like your poem because in 13 little words you have created a nice image and then some.
Thank you Tess!
You should check out this blog, http://fiercebuddhist.wordpress.com/2012/04/02/at-the-media-circus/ He posts new Haiku’s almost daily. They’re really good. I don’t think they are all rooted in seasons anymore, I think that’s kind of the “Old School”. Seems that these days they’re more diverse. Great job, now I have my own “deserted” haiku floating in my head… :)
Thanks Tiffany. I will go have a look at the Fierce Buddhist. :-)!
I think you will like his blogs… they seem “up your alley”! I know I really enjoy reading both of you!
Interesting and unusual for a Haiku! Well done.
Hi Auth Imp,
I am new at haiku and not quite sure what I am doing. In what way did you find it unusual? Glad you enjoyed and always look forward to your comments! :-)
I’m am certainly no expert. At anything I might add ;) but traditionally Haiku is grounded in a season. But of course, what is tradition for one… I love exploring new ways of doing old things. I also enjoy seeing how others do this. Be bold and have fun!
That’s right! I’d forgotten about the season thing. Dang. Oh, well. Thanks for the reminder!
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